Burning Soul



For years
I have screamed-
Sitting atop the crematorium furnace.

At the fumes of the burning deads.

I wish to go mute
Sleeping through the Eternity!


Submitted for Sunday 160



72 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Steve Isaak
    Jun 15, 2011 @ 03:22:22

    Dark, fun.


  2. Rachel
    Jun 13, 2011 @ 21:18:03

    That is just completely awesome, Olivia. I’ve felt that way before, many times!

    Big Monday hugs!


    • Olivia
      Jun 19, 2011 @ 11:05:20

      Thank you Rachel! We all do get to pass through that spot- only a few share about it! Often, the darkness swallows us whole..
      Sending you big Sunday Hugs from India- xoxox


  3. Evelyn
    Jun 13, 2011 @ 05:36:04

    Dark and racy!


  4. monkey man
    Jun 12, 2011 @ 20:42:43

    Very dark 160. Thanks for playing.


  5. MorningAJ (Jobbing Writer)
    Jun 12, 2011 @ 17:53:24

    That’s deeply creepy!


  6. brian
    Jun 12, 2011 @ 16:34:13

    yikes…love the pic and your words play well on it…they hold the emotional line for sure..


  7. 700miles
    Nov 16, 2010 @ 19:21:39

    this is eerie and awesome all rolled into one. great work liv….


  8. The Reason You Come
    Nov 10, 2010 @ 20:39:23

    Should I be scared that the darkness of this poem appeals to me? In any case, I like it. I don’t like movies that are dark or frightening (ex. vampire movies like Twilight), but that theme appeals to me when it comes to the written word.

    I’m happy to be on Potluck again! ๐Ÿ™‚


    • Olivia
      Nov 11, 2010 @ 00:50:11

      Thank you My Dear Lovely.. You just said my mind. I too don’t watch horror. However love the dark poems- paradox!!
      Welcome back My Dear.. so happy to see you around.. Loads of Love MyD xox


  9. Jamie Dedes
    Nov 10, 2010 @ 07:15:26

    Olivia, dear, how darkly evocative.

    Sorry I haven’t been by enough. So busy, busy with NaNo and other stuff. But not an excuse.

    I hope you are having alot of fun with it, not stressing. Let me know how you are doing and what your thoughts are now that we care into Day Nine and moving forward.

    Smile and be happy.

    Peace and Hugs,


    • Olivia
      Nov 10, 2010 @ 10:57:18

      Tell me about it- I am like completely lost. Already panicking.. I used to write about 3000 words almost everyday. It all got staggered ever since I joined the Potluck- LOLsss. Posting invites for two days takes the entire mind out of me- I mean reading atleast 200 poems in 2 days.. I guess I’ll turn into a live “poemer”- “poeming” even while speaking.. hahaha

      I am enjoying big time with such. My friend had been here day before so am completely drained now. Since I have stayed alone ever since; it become really hectic to adjust and adapt.. So I am like lost in a trans state- since yesterday evening..

      I am writing tit bits- one mind says this, the other- that. So I am scribbling both ๐Ÿ˜› The idea is to write and I am not letting the tempo go!

      Smiles- xoxox


  10. Shea Atkin Tillery
    Nov 10, 2010 @ 04:41:09

    Ok, so I thought that was me that wrote that!
    Amazing job, soul sister ๐Ÿ™‚


  11. Sumit Sarkar
    Nov 09, 2010 @ 17:33:43

    I sometimes have the same feelings…
    Thank you for this wonderful piece… ๐Ÿ™‚


  12. Shail Raghuvanshi
    Nov 09, 2010 @ 12:32:50

    Olivia, I wouldn’t have liked this piece of poetry in any other way. Nice…

    My Potluck link is


  13. dasuntoucha
    Nov 09, 2010 @ 07:45:30

    Deliciously dark and lovely.


  14. A.B. Thomas
    Nov 09, 2010 @ 07:18:57

    Wow, like springing from atop a geyser the image constructed in so little words is amazing! Great write!


  15. Kavita
    Nov 09, 2010 @ 06:41:32

    Super dark, Olivia!! Gruesome, but VERY insightful and thought provoking !!!
    You may go dead, but never ever get buried in the soils of grief! It stinks! ๐Ÿ™‚


    • Olivia
      Nov 09, 2010 @ 07:30:22

      You just said it Kavz Darling- That indeed was the intent of going Dead- as in sure- as in the reality.
      I often wonder what possesses my head when I say such.. ๐Ÿ™‚ xoxox


  16. Shashi
    Nov 09, 2010 @ 03:16:22

    I visited it again .. and liked again… I am happy that I could be here.. Olivia

    เฅ เคจเคฎเคƒ เคถเคฟเคตเคพเคฏ
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com


  17. Julie Jordan Scott
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 23:03:30

    Oh, how I love the “willowing at the fumes” line. Beautiful…

    My first potluck poem for this week.


  18. thoughtsnotlost
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 21:27:23

    This has a “spooky” flavor to it…I loved it!


  19. Talon
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 20:26:01

    Yikes! That is not a place I’d like to perch! Powerful, Olivia!


  20. fiveloaf
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 20:06:18

    woah- creepy creepy still! makes me ponder much!


  21. RiikaInfinityy ๋งˆ์™•
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 20:05:14

    I am in for any dark dark poetry!=D Your words sent delight, amazing =P


  22. Jingle
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 19:06:08


    here is one of my entries,
    a poetry award 4 you and thank you for your support on week 9 potluck fun.


  23. Luke Prater
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 18:09:23

    strong stuff Olivia. Cheers. You want to join the dead?

    Warmest Salad


    (mine are here –


    • Olivia
      Nov 09, 2010 @ 06:24:40

      haha.. I call sleep synonymous with that of going dead- as in rest and close peepers to lose myself!! Happy Potluck to you too- xox


  24. Ramesh Sood
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 17:30:50

    But then ‘Dead’ may not be sleeping thorugh eternity.. we need to be careful about what we ask for.. well as a poem.. a verse.. beautiful and deep.. keep writing..



    • Olivia
      Nov 09, 2010 @ 06:26:00

      Hello Rameshji,

      I wanting to rest and be at peace is what I mean here. As in not bothering with keeping awake and hence even alive.. I say I go dead while sleeping and hence the expression.. ๐Ÿ™‚



  25. Jessicas Japes
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 16:46:38


  26. Jessicas Japes
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 16:46:04

    Very cleverly constructed, Olivia. I like the phrase ‘go dead’ – neat.
    Um, I might be tempted to leave the exclamation mark out tho…might keep it even creepier?


  27. Scent of my heart
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 13:07:29

    I very much like your way with words, and the messages you sent with your writing! Lovely one dear! Have a lovely new week! xoxox


  28. ~Drew
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 11:41:19

    Creepy… and I love creepy! =)


  29. Reflections
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 09:08:39

    Powerful but chilling piece.


  30. Jingle
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 09:02:33

    hope that you get what you wished for..

    lovely piece.


  31. Teresa
    Nov 08, 2010 @ 08:35:17

    This is just chilling. You certainly do have a way of reaching powerful feelings.

    Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/11/07/gettysburg/


  32. Shashi
    Oct 03, 2010 @ 11:31:00

    Very stark and raw.. I loved the raw energy of the verse… thanks for sharing.

    เฅ เคจเคฎเคƒ เคถเคฟเคตเคพเคฏ
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com


  33. Trisha
    Oct 01, 2010 @ 21:26:57

    beautiful poem. life should go on.. its priceless.


  34. tasithoughts
    Sep 29, 2010 @ 20:26:46

    Powerful. I can feel the depth of yearning.



  35. Jingle
    Sep 29, 2010 @ 06:01:24

    Thanks for linking,
    you are super sweet and helpful..
    take care…


  36. Jingle
    Sep 29, 2010 @ 06:00:54

    powerful wish,
    well said..


  37. buttercup600
    Sep 29, 2010 @ 02:44:23

    Thought provoking of the highest standard girlfriend!! That image took my breath away and compliments your poem soooo well!! Loved this …you are such a good writer my dear!! Happy to be here!! Mwah xxxxx


    • Olivia
      Sep 29, 2010 @ 11:05:53

      My dear Sweetheart.. you just rock.. I keep getting amused reading your words. How you always succeed in reading the essence beyond the letters.. Writer and stuff? Im still learning..
      Mwaaaahs to you


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