Shaping Up



Let the chisel define my shape,
Carving a beautiful figurine of me!
Rub me on my sharp edges,
Polishing me till I become tranquil.

Hammer me hard, to check my strength-
Riffling an intricate pattern of me!
I wish to shine bright and big,
Standing tall through all the timelines.

Dissolve me within the Ether!


Submitted for Friday Flass 55


Submitted for Magpie Tales


52 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Anna :o]
    May 11, 2011 @ 21:22:52

    Love it – took my breath away!

    Anna :o]


  2. Jingle
    May 11, 2011 @ 07:14:12

    love it,

    sorry for missing this on 55,

    stunning words..wishing your dreams coming true!


  3. Martin H
    May 11, 2011 @ 02:50:51

    Trusting to the hands of the artist. you have shaped this poem well, too.


  4. Kim Nelson
    May 11, 2011 @ 02:05:49

    This is one of my favorites of yours. I love the idea of the elements refining us, not eroding us. Lovely.


  5. tess kincaid
    May 10, 2011 @ 21:18:14

    I love the notion of polished tranquility.


  6. Lyn
    May 10, 2011 @ 16:54:49

    So much strength and truth in the conclusion!


  7. Dr.FTSE
    May 10, 2011 @ 15:22:36

    I like the image your poem brings to mind . . the sculptor chopping off the bits that didn’t look like Saint Francis . .


  8. honeyhaiku
    May 10, 2011 @ 06:11:32

    Lovely verse, Olivia. Just lovely.


  9. a noiseless patient spider
    May 10, 2011 @ 04:36:49

    a very lovely plea. I can see the beautiful figurine at the end of these lines. Thanks for sharing.


  10. Helena
    May 10, 2011 @ 01:50:29

    Wow! I love the vision of polishing something till tranquil. Another stunning write, Olivia.


  11. Anthony North
    May 09, 2011 @ 19:58:02

    Ah, to sculpt ourselves thus. Great words.


  12. Steve Isaak
    Apr 30, 2011 @ 04:43:46

    Good versifyin’.


  13. Belinda
    Apr 30, 2011 @ 03:10:12

    Love the provocative and double meanings in this one. Great 55, Olivia!


  14. G-Man
    Apr 29, 2011 @ 16:23:56

    After getting rubbed, polished, and hammered, how do you find the strength to get chisled?
    Your a sexy little thing Olivia, be careful.
    Very cryptic 55.
    Thanks for playing and have a Kick Ass Week-End


    • Olivia
      Apr 29, 2011 @ 16:29:05

      Hey G-man,

      That’s what is happening now.. exactly! Preparing to get chiseled.. πŸ™‚
      Thank you so much for being concerned n your wishes!!

      Love playing with this one.. πŸ˜€
      Hugs xoxoxox


  15. Polly (5th Sister)
    Apr 29, 2011 @ 16:22:23

    I read this piece as one’s life experience in a few words, beautifully concise. I really, really liked this prose. I’m glad to have dropped in.


  16. dustus
    Apr 29, 2011 @ 08:00:31

    A very provocative piece with excellent double meanings, well expressed. Awesome job on the 55, Olivia.


  17. moondustwriter
    Apr 29, 2011 @ 07:48:39

    a beautiful reflection of woman
    wishing for so many things
    beauty shines here!!!


  18. brian
    Apr 29, 2011 @ 07:33:09

    oh but you are a finely polished jewel…no way shall we send you to the ether just yet…smiles.


  19. Caribbean Fool
    Dec 02, 2010 @ 22:00:29

    Hey Olivia, thanks for posting your newest. Sorry I haven’t dropped in for a while, but while I had a minute I figured to say aloha and find out how things are going in your neck of the woods. Love the short poem, shows in very succinct terms the passion you bring to life and your willingness to share in the joys and sorrows of everything around you. Take care and keep posting! There is some great poetry in you and it is a pleasure to read any time. Until next time,



  20. Kellie Elmore
    Nov 30, 2010 @ 02:11:03

    i cannot help but sigh every time i read you Olivia! you always bring a smile. your style is so beautiful! and I love the graphics you use! πŸ™‚ You should so post this in my wish jar! πŸ™‚


    • Olivia
      Feb 04, 2011 @ 19:36:29

      Thanks Kellie for your beautiful words.. I am flattered!
      I had been keeping very occupied through the last few months and that’s why this reply is coming your way so belated..

      I hope you know you live in my thoughts..
      Love n Hugs xx


  21. Jingle
    Nov 29, 2010 @ 07:22:06

    you already shine bright and big…
    feel confident,
    keep smiling…

    love the image, the color is super entertaining…
    masterful piece for me.


  22. Scent of my heart
    Nov 27, 2010 @ 02:27:12

    I wish to shine bright and big
    Standing tall through all the timelines…. You shine my dear with your words


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