Going Dead



Everything around me is falling apart-
A small chirp seems to be one hell of a noise!
Unable to see, or stay composed;
I breathe hard to suck in more air.

My reflexes are drunk,
I move as if in dream..
My head’s now spinning-
I need some sleep.


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42 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Jingle
    May 06, 2011 @ 07:32:15

    rest in peace
    when you are at ease.

    well done poem.
    love the imagery.


  2. Lyn
    May 04, 2011 @ 01:59:41

    I sometimes forget how to fall asleep, other times nod over my keyboard..I need it!! You too!


  3. honeyhaiku
    May 03, 2011 @ 08:09:23

    I like Anthony suffer from ME/CFS and understand this need for sleep; a unfortunate daily affliction. I like the depict to fatigue you created.


    • Olivia
      May 03, 2011 @ 12:55:44

      Thank you Dear! I know this condition. It’s just opposite of having a life..
      Hopefully things have worked out for everyone now.. hugs xox


  4. Anthony North
    May 02, 2011 @ 22:52:47

    As a long term ME/cfs sufferer, I know what you mean.


    • Olivia
      May 03, 2011 @ 00:10:56

      Aaw! It takes the very life out of the being North!
      While working with Convergys for the US shift, it had made a zombie out of me.. I had also undergone similar condition myself much after leaving the work! I had tried recalling that while writing this one down..

      Thankfully for the past one year, ever since I have been writing; I sleep like a fallen timber log.. lolss


  5. A. Decker
    May 01, 2011 @ 04:33:07

    I do recognize the “symptoms.” πŸ˜‰

    Well done!


  6. ladynimue
    Apr 30, 2011 @ 15:47:34

    sleep cures a lot of things !! Hope you are having a sweet one πŸ™‚


  7. Steve Isaak
    Apr 30, 2011 @ 03:37:03

    Good, enjoyable piece – relatable.


  8. Meryl Jaffe
    Apr 29, 2011 @ 17:34:22

    So do I!!!! A lot on my plate, and maybe age, just makes it harder to sleep.

    Sweet dreams.


  9. upinthecosmos
    Apr 29, 2011 @ 11:29:37

    I should sleep now… nice write. Stop in & read High in the Sky… it’s not exactly fitting the sleep category but the fingers just when where the mind & picture took them:-)


  10. Becca Givens
    Apr 29, 2011 @ 10:38:25

    When I get that tired – I feel like I am in quicksand or drunk or drunk in quicksand! πŸ˜€


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  12. Ina
    Dec 07, 2010 @ 03:18:33

    Beautiful πŸ™‚ Sleep well then. It is probably night for you now.


  13. ScottlB
    Dec 06, 2010 @ 06:52:14

    Sweet dreams πŸ™‚ nice read thanks for sharing


  14. Jingle
    Dec 06, 2010 @ 00:18:31

    sweet dreams…


  15. Jingle
    Dec 06, 2010 @ 00:17:50

    My reflexes are drunk,
    I move as if in dream..
    My head’s now spinning-
    I need to sleep.

    lovely piece, you instantly drew me in,
    well done!
    Happy Sunday!


  16. Pat Cegan
    Dec 04, 2010 @ 04:08:22

    Let’s see: falling in love, falling out of love, hung over, or just had enough for now. Sweet dreams, sweet lady. Every things seems better after a good nightΒ΄s sleep. Nice poem. pat


    • Olivia
      Dec 10, 2010 @ 01:12:39

      You so said it Pat.. Only a sleep it was.. Don’t really believe in love- it’s pretty subjective.. πŸ™‚
      Thank you for supporting me .. xoxox


  17. Caribbean Fool
    Dec 04, 2010 @ 01:28:31

    That seems a really rough ending to a really long night. Is this based on something specific? Certainly happens to the best of us. Easy to commiserate over the impossible. Very dark poem. Admirable on some levels, as the universe works toward entropy. Hope all is well,



  18. trisha
    Dec 03, 2010 @ 20:51:49

    beautiful poem but its not death, its sleep, a soothing sleep.


  19. Tootsie
    Dec 03, 2010 @ 10:39:15



  20. Kavita
    Dec 03, 2010 @ 00:23:37

    Either that, or it’s a migraine! πŸ˜‰
    Take care and rest well, girlie…
    And when you wake up, ping me…. I shall pour you some hot tea… what say!?
    Love ya!!!


    • Olivia
      Dec 10, 2010 @ 01:16:23

      You are so sweet.. Let’s see- I already enjoyed, pasta, shrikhand, custard..
      Just a sleepy head talking here.. πŸ™‚
      I did sleep very well..
      HUGS xoxox


  21. Scent of my heart
    Dec 02, 2010 @ 23:48:19

    Sleep well dear, the morning will make the noise a beautiful song!


  22. Kellie Elmore
    Dec 02, 2010 @ 23:06:02

    this reminds me of the many times i have been delusional from lack of sleep. it does such funny things to a person lol! and plays some crazy tricks to ur head lol! but i do like this alot. i always love your poetry! πŸ™‚


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