My day ends no sooner it begins..

I write words-
Read a few more,
But never speak any!

I pretend I am sleeping-
Then get occupied,
With the mundane phase that’s on!

I’m as hopeless-
As one could be,
Desperately needing an opportunity to flee!

I see no escape-
Crying doesn’t help,
Tears dried up years back!

My day ends no sooner it begins.


Submitted for Theme Thursday


39 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Anna :o]
    May 18, 2011 @ 16:16:54

    Sad and beautifully done.

    Anna :o]


  2. brian
    May 17, 2011 @ 19:46:47

    you capture that feeling of hopelessness well olivia and make us feel it through your words…nicely played…


  3. Shari Sunday
    May 17, 2011 @ 16:36:01

    Olivia, This is very sad, image and words. I send you best wishes and love.


  4. Jingle
    May 16, 2011 @ 20:52:00

    smart one,
    love the image and wording, 🙂


  5. goldenhairbear10
    May 16, 2011 @ 20:16:07

    It begins very sadly. But it is so amazing.


  6. Kim Nelson
    May 13, 2011 @ 04:28:51

    This begins so sadly, Olivia, and then overwhelms. Your emotions are in every word.



  7. Meri of Meri's Musings
    May 12, 2011 @ 23:55:23

    I think when we’re in that place, escape looks like the only answer. It’s hard to sit and wait for the lesson.


  8. lolamouse
    Mar 04, 2011 @ 06:49:50

    I can feel the hopelessness in your words. The picture is perfect as well.


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  10. ladynimue
    Feb 15, 2011 @ 23:39:38

    I write words-
    Read a few more,
    But never speak any!

    thats the same i am doing off late .. dunno if its the mood or just the phase … sigh !


  11. Angela
    Feb 13, 2011 @ 22:49:21

    Great work. I can really feel the despair in your words.


  12. kolembo
    Feb 11, 2011 @ 19:06:01

    Great use of grammer, lifts the poem, the rhythm, very interesting read, real nice.


  13. mairmusic
    Feb 11, 2011 @ 01:43:34

    one foot in front of the other, my friend. the world is truly beautiful if we can but find the strength to look.


  14. Kavita
    Feb 11, 2011 @ 01:13:03

    Ouch.. ouch and OUCH! These words spoke volumes, sweetie!
    Let’s lessen this hopelessness, and make life more carefree
    Then there’ll be no reason to wanna flee…



    • Olivia
      Feb 11, 2011 @ 13:49:58

      Thanks Kavz..
      There are still many a things left for me to straighten up! You see the first set of consequences have been meted with; it’s the outcome or the eventuality which unfortunately gets blended with the major issue or maybe bringing me back to square one after all the hard- work is what is killing me.
      I am reaching a point wherein I am deciding that I am done with sitting duck; hoping for the things to turn good. I guess it’s about time I start to flap my wings again to start my fly!

      Once again, I thank yu for being so kind to me- your words make me feel a lot better.. 🙂
      mwaahhh xox


  15. Rashmi
    Feb 09, 2011 @ 16:37:45

    Wish you a very happy life ahead,Olivia….Hope all your sadness and loneliness will end soon and we get to see you full of happiness…
    Here is mine for potluck


  16. A.B. Thomas
    Feb 09, 2011 @ 08:19:47

    I can relate so well to this, I felt like that at one point in my life – great write


    • Olivia
      Feb 09, 2011 @ 11:18:01

      🙂 Only that this phase has stretched over 3 years now.. I do feel very strongly that it is bound to change n soon; the holding on becomes majorly difficult!! Love xx


  17. tasithoughts
    Feb 08, 2011 @ 20:13:59

    Wishing you HOPE!



  18. fiveloaf
    Feb 08, 2011 @ 14:52:14

    you are not whirling anymore are you olivia? for a persons day to end before it starts is a nono to me haha! tq for your visit to my blog..


  19. liv2write2day
    Feb 08, 2011 @ 06:16:00

    My dear Olivia, you and your whirling mind are special to me.


  20. Scent of my heart
    Feb 08, 2011 @ 01:37:42

    There is always a hope dear, even in the tears dried and disappeared! Lovely Potluck!


  21. Jingle
    Feb 08, 2011 @ 01:27:07

    you speak when you must,

    powerful and compact piece.
    well done.




  22. Ina
    Feb 08, 2011 @ 00:07:38

    hi Olivia, good poem, I hope for less hopelessness for you in the future…


  23. Joey Polanski
    Feb 07, 2011 @ 06:47:12

    If hopelessness

    Is all we’ve got,

    Then Life’s a mess.

    So let’s hope not.


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