Decepting Truth



ExcavatingΒ my desire to survive,
Breathing deep to feel alive-
I smiled at the things unknown;
In hope to meet my future soon..

Sun seems to be cheerfully bright,
Anxiously waiting for the things to strike-
The ones that would change the mundane:
Making my Life a better place to be in..

Caressing myself in self- obsession,
I sit still watching the vivid delusions:
All that I touch now twinkles back,
Vacillating of my travel on an unknown track!


66 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. lolamouse
    Mar 23, 2011 @ 22:18:54

    Our future seems to fall into our laps when we least expect it! Nice write!


  2. lunawitch15
    Mar 23, 2011 @ 01:25:35

    sometimes we have to let our breathe out as we look to what is next.


  3. Sam
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 12:24:30

    This is beautiful Olivia… Love the flow… πŸ™‚


    • Olivia
      Mar 25, 2011 @ 12:57:40

      Thank you Sam! When I was writing this one- I wasn’t sure how the readers would see it- for I wanted to talk about how I feel- happy, anxious, whimsical.. some what brooding.. women- meh!!

      Hugs xox


  4. K. Shawn Edgar
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 09:18:33

    Wistful beauty and even flow.


  5. danroberson
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 08:10:32

    A little uncertainty but optimistically preparing for all the beautiful things that wait along your path. A great poem!


    • Olivia
      Mar 25, 2011 @ 13:02:09

      Hey Dan- it’s the uncertainty that’s killing me.. 😦
      I wasn’t really sure if readers would see all th emotions expressed- they do.. πŸ™‚

      hugs xx


  6. TestingTrueChange
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 07:47:23

    Enjoyed this, well done πŸ™‚


  7. NotATameLion
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 06:56:40

    Rarely do poems make me feel physical things. This one did. Lovely.


  8. A.B. Thomas
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 06:54:22

    cool write – sometimes purgatory isn’t so angst driven, loved your take on the more alive sense of anticipation of what could be and what shall be


    • Olivia
      Mar 25, 2011 @ 13:19:42

      What a considerate comment Anthony- Thanks you!
      Yes.. things are at their weirdest best right now- aah a paradox πŸ™‚

      Smiles xxx


  9. tasithoughts
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 04:12:22

    I love the texture of the meaning in the words. Well done, Olivia!


  10. Kim Nelson
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 03:17:57

    I must wonder if our poems sprang from similar sources:


    • Olivia
      Mar 25, 2011 @ 13:40:28

      Indeed, it feels like you spoke my mind.. πŸ™‚
      Thank you for the blessings because your words (poem) sounded like blessings.. πŸ˜€

      Love xox


  11. Kavita
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 02:43:42

    Packed with emotions and wistfulness.. I really like how you are appreciating what you have, and yet there is that little tinge of doubt hidden in there somewhere, that says all this may not last long after all..

    A deep thought, Liv.. and very well expressed too
    I wish the BEST for you!!! Always!!


    • Olivia
      Mar 25, 2011 @ 13:42:48

      HOLY BOW!!!!!!!!!!
      You just read it the way it was supposed to be! I had so many thoughts in my mind that I wasn’t sure how this might be read as!

      I am happy, yet anticipating a major change and anxious about that too.. πŸ™‚
      Girl, you are a fab mind reader! Hugs xoxoxoxox


  12. mairmusic
    Mar 22, 2011 @ 00:46:08

    Beautiful lines, my friend. Mine isn’t so optimistic…


  13. Ramesh Sood
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 22:53:03

    Do we move forward to meet future or future quietly embraces us wearing the garb of today… don’t know Olivia.. but you have written a lovely poem here.. enjoyed it..


    • Olivia
      Mar 25, 2011 @ 14:20:31

      hahaha! That was very clever of you to say so..
      Apparently, it’s how we see it- it’s all happening around. But since we can’t see unless it hits, we call it a future; when it’s just next to us- right here!!

      Thank you Dear.. Smiles xxx


  14. fiveloaf
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 21:51:21

    you plan to marry olivia? since you like to write i think you’d find your mr. right in the library or bookstore haha! here’s mine..


  15. Mary
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 19:58:44

    ‘I hope to meet my future soon’
    I like that – very nice!


  16. seabell
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 19:05:03

    Sometimes we have to act and face the unknown… A deep moment well pictured!


  17. Lyn
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 17:44:40

    Best to act on our own, not wait for that special “other” to lead the way!! Love this one..


  18. Katherine
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 17:30:49

    Seems like you’re in a process of discovering yourself. πŸ™‚


  19. Ina
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 17:00:03

    Good poem, I hope the future will be just as sparkling! πŸ™‚ Best wishes!


  20. North Texas Haiku
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 16:35:08

    Wonderful poem,
    the last line is tremendous
    “Vacillating of my travel on an unknown track!”


  21. Becca Givens
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 10:51:38

    “Excavating my desire to survive,
    Breathing deep to feel alive- …”

    Ahhh, while waiting for the imminent next chapter … well done! becca


  22. bendedspoon
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 10:36:42

    Lovely poem! Your desire will be born and you will be smiling even with the moon πŸ™‚


  23. Jamie Dedes
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 09:34:58

    Well sometimes self-deciption is survival. At least for a time.

    Well done for Potluck. Perfect, Olivia.


  24. Reggie
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 09:27:27

    “I smiled at the things unknown;
    In hope….”
    Well done Olivia


  25. thingy
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 07:50:27

    A beautiful poem with such a lovely presentation. I’m a sucker for sparkly.


  26. Kodjo Deynoo
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 07:32:28

    This is lovely and true for the sun is needed


  27. louisedouglas
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 07:12:01

    I love how this begins an the tension builds. nice..


  28. Krislin Neo, Ting (Syracuse Pike)
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 07:07:15

    Am so glad to read your work again.. Had been waiting..

    Ace in expressing the inner flow of emotions with your piece.. Great take on!!!

    Here is mine – Lies

    and – Deception

    Happy Monday and *HUG*


  29. Jingle
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 06:57:32

    do what comforts you, stay cool…

    lovely imagery..


  30. jameschristophersheppard
    Mar 21, 2011 @ 06:34:44

    Nice poem! I know the feeling too- waiting for the next chapter to begin. I enjoy the embrace of change here. πŸ™‚


  31. Cheryl
    Feb 18, 2011 @ 12:27:21

    Nice poem, Olivia. Glad to see you’re still writing. Miss talking to you. Hope all is well my dear.

    Hugs and Love


    • Olivia
      Feb 18, 2011 @ 13:04:26

      Yup Cheryl,

      Good to see you chirped up.. Anytime I feel low, I look at the birds. They keep hopping n jumping around- chirping away to glory.. πŸ™‚
      Talk to me anytime you wish to.. mail, blog, thoughts……….

      Sending you a huge basket of kisses


  32. ladynimue
    Feb 15, 2011 @ 23:38:07

    Loved it .. perfect moods to describe a contemplative mood πŸ™‚


  33. ghosterb
    Feb 15, 2011 @ 02:17:01

    Nicely done my friend!


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