Deceptive images embedded on my way-
Creating a haze on a broad lit day.
Blocking my view of what lies ahead,
Making me dizzy in my head.

The moving shapes above the ground-
Fumes of the burning earth creating those around!
As though to express its tormenting rage,
A reply to the abuse; I envisage.

Yet as I walk further down,
The colors bled from seemingly brown..
Enabling my eyes to see beyond;
At one time what seemed to be a shining pond.

I look back upon the road I had traveled,
I see all the mysteries I had unraveled.
Still stood there – as if in time,
Laced in acid – pillars of lime..


31 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Taylor Boomer
    Aug 17, 2012 @ 00:48:35


    hope you well.


  2. Sajeevs blog
    Aug 09, 2012 @ 15:35:06

    Nice vivid imagery in this poem


  3. yelena m.
    Mar 26, 2011 @ 02:37:04

    A kaleidoscope of colours asounds my eyes as I read this poem. Just perfect.


  4. Raghu
    Mar 25, 2011 @ 03:58:09

    Rocking..!! 😀


  5. Sam373
    Mar 23, 2011 @ 19:52:00

    I walked with you, stopped with you and looked back with you. I saw you grown as you grew.


  6. sillyfrogsusan
    Mar 08, 2011 @ 23:11:15

    You rock!


  7. Iwrite4u
    Mar 08, 2011 @ 21:55:02

    Rhyming poem…well written.I walked along with you as I read it


  8. Elaine Spall
    Mar 07, 2011 @ 09:57:45

    Love the rhyme scheme. Beautiful poem!


  9. Jamie Dedes
    Mar 07, 2011 @ 07:06:40

    Bravo, my Olivia! Well written and spirited. Quintessentially Olivia. 🙂

    Happy Rally.


  10. Rajlakshmi
    Mar 05, 2011 @ 21:28:54

    the ending is powerful … well written …


  11. A.B. Thomas
    Mar 05, 2011 @ 21:05:43

    A grand write – I loved the imagery and strangely enough the way it sort of pulled memories of experiences that imposed themselves upon it


  12. Dag Travner
    Mar 05, 2011 @ 20:19:08

    I like the scenery you are evoking, stunning imagery, it’s wonderful, Olivia 🙂


  13. Ina
    Mar 05, 2011 @ 16:05:54

    Lovely and mysterious!


  14. Leo (Leonnyes)
    Mar 05, 2011 @ 11:02:05

    how beautifully descripted a mirage in the sands of the desert. lovely rally entry, Olly…


  15. tasithoughts
    Mar 05, 2011 @ 03:31:33

    There is something simply magical about the way you write, my dear friend.




  16. scottf
    Mar 05, 2011 @ 02:52:14

    so well written!! You’ve catured the essence of the allure of the road here!


  17. athursdayschild has a long way to go and much to be thankful for.
    Mar 04, 2011 @ 09:09:17

    Especially like the last verse. But then I have this thing about time and unraveling mysteries.


  18. lolamouse
    Mar 04, 2011 @ 07:32:14

    Great imagery. Nicely done.


  19. Jingle
    Mar 04, 2011 @ 06:53:35

    love it..
    your word choice is always grand..

    have a fun day.


  20. NcMerci
    Mar 04, 2011 @ 00:45:25

    I loved how the poem flowed. The vividness of the poem made it enjoyable to read.


  21. thingy
    Mar 03, 2011 @ 21:08:15

    This was a true emotional quest. Thank-you for sharing.


  22. Rashmi
    Mar 03, 2011 @ 20:30:45

    Wonderful…the last 4 lines ….with all the mysteries unraveled standing in pillars of lime….wonderful image… with underlying message…
    Here is mine


  23. Rashmi
    Mar 03, 2011 @ 20:30:19

    Wonderful…the last 4 lines ….with all the mysteries unraveled standing in pillars of lime….wonderful image… with underlying message…


  24. Krislin Neo, Ting (Syracuse Pike)
    Mar 03, 2011 @ 19:48:11

    When time stood still this is… I enjoyed this read..

    In case you have not read mine for this week rally, here it is..



  25. fiveloaf
    Mar 03, 2011 @ 19:24:19

    great poem olivia.. my wk 39 is here.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/17/regret/


  26. Scent of my heart
    Feb 24, 2011 @ 10:46:32

    Gather the best lesson of those mysteries you’ve unraveled and make the mirage a reality to enjoy …


  27. kshawnedgar
    Feb 24, 2011 @ 09:03:50

    Gotta say, I was turned off at the start by way and day. Too easy. But by the end I was really pulled in by this poem’s imagery and movement. Thanks.


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