Rift

Submitted for- One Stop Poetry- One Shot Wednesday

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21 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Nimue
    Mar 01, 2011 @ 02:35:35

    super duper loved this darling !!

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  2. Reggie
    Feb 25, 2011 @ 08:48:01

    Well said Olivia…and creatively done

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  3. Shashi
    Feb 24, 2011 @ 15:04:32

    Dear Olivia

    Very powerful and sad.. I could feel the desperation in your words… very vividly…

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-tanka-and-search-for-being.html
    Connect with me at Twitter @VerseEveryDay

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  4. liv2write2day
    Feb 24, 2011 @ 10:01:20

    Creative way to present this, Olivia. And wise not to waste energy on dramatics.

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  5. Eric
    Feb 23, 2011 @ 22:59:06

    If you wish to fly, you have only to try.

    A soaring One Shot, Olivia!

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  6. brian miller
    Feb 23, 2011 @ 18:54:42

    i understand this one…drama has a way of sucking the joy out of your favorite things…

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  7. Claudia
    Feb 23, 2011 @ 18:19:55

    i like the butterfly in all those broken words – flying to a better place… sometimes we just need to fly a bit to get another perspective and things fall back into place…hopefully

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  8. Kavita
    Feb 23, 2011 @ 12:57:51

    Ooohh… powerful words there, girl…so very heartfelt!
    And the scattered form in which you wrote those lines… it was simply brilliant!!
    It is so much in alignment with the essence of the poem… you know, like the scattered thoughts of despair, betrayal.. all of that…

    Really well executed, my dear!!!
    Snowy hugs for you!!

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    • Olivia
      Feb 23, 2011 @ 13:05:40

      You made my Day with those snowy hugs- quick, someone get a warmer for me- make it double folded- fast!!

      I’m glad you liked it! I tried it on the 1st time- so minus the jing- bang.. Now that I have discovered it, I’ll work more on such forms! Your liking it- kinda approves of the new found way of presentation! oh yeah, it took time.. like all good things to happen.. 🙂 self obsessed!!! hahah

      Sending Love for all that snowy filled words- I’m sliding already on those
      xoxox

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  10. iBeingMe
    Feb 23, 2011 @ 12:04:43

    Awesome Olivia 🙂

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