Cephalopod slogging along the edge,
Dragging alongwith ‘tself a cage:
Proactive shell; burdening baggage-
Home becoming a coffin carriage!

Where it lived; once a cottage,
To all it seemed a great ‘vantage.
Doom it spelled, casting bondage;
Beyond repair, beyond salvage.

Already crawled a long mileage,
Difficult ‘twas to gather courage.
Now acting my role on this stage-
Void displaced with shades of rampage!

Painting now a profound image,
Wanting to travel with my written wordage;
I’ve stepped up like some eternal adage,
Wishing myself “Bon Voyage”..


Force an unconventional one to survive in the most traditional pattern; a revolution would be born!


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76 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Umamaheswari A
    Apr 14, 2011 @ 20:46:02

    ” Bon Voyage “..perfect to the theme and wonderful rhyming


  2. Jannie Funster
    Apr 14, 2011 @ 03:24:25

    There once was a slogger named Gary
    whose home on his back he did carry
    but every so often
    the shell it would soften
    but Gary remained ever merry.

    Please forgive. This is the WORST lymeric ever on the face of the earth. But off the top of my head. 🙂

    Thanks for your poetic inspiration in this, Olivia!! 🙂



    • Olivia
      Apr 14, 2011 @ 13:17:54

      Your limerick made me smile- so it can’t be bad..!! If at all, it’s a happy work.. I loved it Girl.. 🙂

      I thank you for such a beautiful one- inspiring me to smile!
      Many Hugs xoxox


  3. Eric
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 21:59:30

    I laughed out loud at you starting this with “Cephalopod” – it’s one of my friend’s favorite disparaging terms to use for dull people who don’t seem to use their brains.

    (Ironically, cephalopods are the most intelligent of all invertebrates)

    Nice job on the rhyming scheme, Olivia! Well done!


    • Olivia
      Apr 13, 2011 @ 22:54:38

      Well if that’s what “cephalopod” did to you; then mission accomplished! That is including the “irony” part too!!

      Thank you so much for stopping by.. glad you liked it!!
      Hugs x


  4. Justin Germino
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 21:27:40

    Enjoyed the poem, brought images of the weight we all carry on our backs.


  5. barbara
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 20:21:16

    great r-evolution….Oliva…nice cadence that rings with “age” ending to self discovery….blessings…bkm


    • Olivia
      Apr 13, 2011 @ 22:57:10

      Thank you Barbara!
      = for liking the poem.. 🙂
      = for your blessings.. 🙂
      I am all set to bring about a revolution indeed.. hugs xx


  6. trisha
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 16:36:46

    fantastic poem olivia- terrific!



  7. Broken Sparkles
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 16:14:09

    Loved the rhymes Olivia, how very brilliant you chose each ending word of each line! Yes to revolution and traveling to find evolution!


    • Olivia
      Apr 13, 2011 @ 18:44:14

      Thank you Blaga Bubble!
      With this phase coming to an end, a major liberation would be spelled! Once this gets over; I’ll talk about what has been going on.. so far, I have been talking in riddles- not anymore.. 🙂

      Many hugs x


  8. ayala
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 05:16:30

    Emotional….out of the shell…nicely done!


  9. brian
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:42:04

    slogging you home along on your back…it can sure feel like that at times…may you find new freedom in your journey…


  10. tolbert
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:38:09

    Wow Olivia! Sixteen lines and fifteen end with “age”…that in itself is remarkable. What a fitting closing:

    Painting now a profound image,
    Wanting to travel with my written wordage;
    I’ve stepped up like some eternal adage,
    Wishing myself “Bon Voyage”…

    I can almost see the smashing of the champagne bottle as a new voyage is christened! Good work!


    • Olivia
      Apr 13, 2011 @ 15:28:16

      Tolbert, thank you so much for your kind words and wishes!
      I am so glad you liked my write.. 🙂

      As I write this, steps have already been taken.. many hugs xxx


  11. Lori
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:10:15

    Very emotional, and I can feel your struggle as I read. I think this my first time here, so it’s nice to meet you 🙂


    • Olivia
      Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:12:48

      Yes indeed! Quite likewise Lori..
      Thank you so much for stopping by! I so appreciate your reading the essence so close.. Wishing you a nice day ahead.. 😀

      Many Hugs xx


  12. moondustwriter
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:01:32

    Apropos as you move from one place to another ( physically or in your mind0

    Thanks for sharing this week with One Shot


  13. Anthony North
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 02:57:22

    Ah, toeing the line. I love rules. How could we break them if they didn’t exist?
    Great words, and well written.


  14. lolamouse
    Apr 13, 2011 @ 01:02:44

    I love “Wishing myself Bon Voyage” May wherever you go be a good place Olivia!


    • Olivia
      Apr 13, 2011 @ 01:17:48

      Thank you Dear One.. I am leaving the old phase behind- I feel it so strongly! I was right.. it was indeed a transition period.. 😀
      Thank you so much for our wishes.. xxx


  15. RAE
    Apr 12, 2011 @ 23:13:24

    Very mystical…an out of body experience for me…wonderfuL!

    RAE 😉


  16. Pat Cegan
    Apr 12, 2011 @ 07:31:23

    Your poems always have such a mystical quality to them. Always leave me thinking. Hugs, pat


  17. tasithoughts
    Apr 12, 2011 @ 04:52:23

    “Wanting to travel with my written wordage”

    Love this poem, Olivia…You are sooooooooooo good.




  18. lunawitch15
    Apr 12, 2011 @ 04:33:21

    um…WOW ! you did it again! blew me away!


  19. fiveloaf
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 23:18:43

    very interesting! mines here olivia~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/18/natures-gravity/


  20. honeyhaiku
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 22:47:24

    Very powerful and hopeful, Olivia! Love this is were to went with this prompt!


  21. Lyn
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 17:17:18

    Onward and upward with the arts..and bon voyage for all your endeavours!!


  22. Andy
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 16:28:13

    Yeah for Olivia! You go girl and may you have many bon voyages! You deserve an abundance of happiness. Love your imagery.
    Best wishes always,


    • Olivia
      Apr 11, 2011 @ 16:48:29

      Thank you Andy! I couldn’t have done it without your wishes.. 🙂
      May thanks.. I am all set.. a big news already on its way!

      Hugs xx


  23. seabell
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 15:03:20

    You are doing it! Good for you! And now that you have started, you have to fight it to the end. I see that you like this poetic form I learned recently it’s called ballad. Is it? Strong and at the same time very musical!


    • Olivia
      Apr 11, 2011 @ 15:11:13

      If I say I intentionally wrote a ballad; that would be like saying cats can fly- or is it fish? I wonder if this raw write could anywhere be critiqued; much less compare it with a form..
      I am honored lady!

      Whatever I write is what I maybe going through at that point of time. I am very passionate about my Life and anything I might take up; so maybe that bubbles up giving a “heroic” edge to its form! It humbles me to read such a beautiful comment!

      Yes, I am all set to win it big!! I feel that power surging inside my veins (why not arteries? Veins carry the waste blood- nevermind)
      Jokes beside.. I may have an announcement to make over soon!

      Hugs xox


  24. Jessica
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 13:57:55

    That’s an interesting one, Olivia! I like the rhyming structure you used, it’s very tight and controlled. Cute title too!



  25. Ina
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 13:01:40

    Impressive Olivia! As always 🙂


  26. joanny
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:45:53


    an unconventional beauty being forced to toe the line, I suspect the force and way this was written the coffined cage beauty or muse will teach others how to soar free when reinvents herself.



    • Olivia
      Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:56:20

      Thank you Joanny! This is my life- story. A pattern I am coming to break at present.. Thank you for wishing her (me) success!

      Hugs xox


  27. cloakedmonk
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:27:54

    A great new metaphor … human as cephalapod.


  28. bendedspoon
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 08:13:15

    For what you have gone through there’s no doubt there will be an evolution of more amazing you! 🙂


  29. Rinkly Rimes
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 07:58:07

    You’ve certainly come out of your shell! Clever use of part-rhymes.


  30. danroberson
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 07:44:15

    Travel far and wide,
    Enjoy the ride,
    Remember that it’s the journey,
    rather than the destination that is important.
    Pack your words in your suitcase and get crawling.


  31. booguloo
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 07:23:41

    Quite the contrast. Learned a new word to boot.


  32. liv2write2day
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:48:11

    Evolution to revolution. Perceptive take on the prompt, Olivia. Sometimes it seems we go backwards…that sound so negative, doesn’t it? But we have the power to change things!


  33. david waters
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:44:28

    vivid images spring from your words…well done.


  34. marousia
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:39:40

    I like the way you weave in the rhymes – elegantly crafted


  35. Mama Zen
    Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:11:50

    Coffin carriage is very cool!


  36. deadpoet88
    Apr 10, 2011 @ 17:54:04

    Wow, amazing piece! Love the imagery, and especially the ending. Great work!


  37. Krislin Neo, Ting (Syracuse Pike)
    Apr 10, 2011 @ 06:39:02

    Wow, wow, wow… What a rich picture you painted… This is just so rich and full for the theme… 🙂

    And I know I mentioned thanks but still thanks again for inviting me to take on this revolutionary theme… *wink*

    Hug and Kiss..


    • Olivia
      Apr 10, 2011 @ 11:36:32

      You are always welcome Lady!

      For some reason, I knew you would love to do the theme; so… 🙂

      Thank you for appreciating this one. Again, my own life story. No fiction! I am glad you liked it.. 😀

      Many Hugs n kisses xoxox


  38. Jingle
    Apr 10, 2011 @ 01:30:11


    a fitting piece for week 30….

    lovely word play, you rock………I am stuck with many roles as well….


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