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Cephalopod slogging along the edge,
Dragging alongwith ‘tself a cage:
Proactive shell; burdening baggage-
Home becoming a coffin carriage!
Where it lived; once a cottage,
To all it seemed a great ‘vantage.
Doom it spelled, casting bondage;
Beyond repair, beyond salvage.
Already crawled a long mileage,
Difficult ‘twas to gather courage.
Now acting my role on this stage-
Void displaced with shades of rampage!
Painting now a profound image,
Wanting to travel with my written wordage;
I’ve stepped up like some eternal adage,
Wishing myself “Bon Voyage”..
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Force an unconventional one to survive in the most traditional pattern; a revolution would be born!
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Olivia's In- Mind Whirls.. 
Apr 14, 2011 @ 20:46:02
” Bon Voyage “..perfect to the theme and wonderful rhyming
Apr 14, 2011 @ 20:55:20
Thank you Uma! Hugs x
Apr 14, 2011 @ 03:24:25
There once was a slogger named Gary
whose home on his back he did carry
but every so often
the shell it would soften
but Gary remained ever merry.
Please forgive. This is the WORST lymeric ever on the face of the earth. But off the top of my head. 🙂
Thanks for your poetic inspiration in this, Olivia!! 🙂
xoxo
Apr 14, 2011 @ 13:17:54
Jannie!
Your limerick made me smile- so it can’t be bad..!! If at all, it’s a happy work.. I loved it Girl.. 🙂
I thank you for such a beautiful one- inspiring me to smile!
Many Hugs xoxox
Apr 13, 2011 @ 21:59:30
I laughed out loud at you starting this with “Cephalopod” – it’s one of my friend’s favorite disparaging terms to use for dull people who don’t seem to use their brains.
(Ironically, cephalopods are the most intelligent of all invertebrates)
Nice job on the rhyming scheme, Olivia! Well done!
Apr 13, 2011 @ 22:54:38
Well if that’s what “cephalopod” did to you; then mission accomplished! That is including the “irony” part too!!
Thank you so much for stopping by.. glad you liked it!!
Hugs x
Apr 13, 2011 @ 21:27:40
Enjoyed the poem, brought images of the weight we all carry on our backs.
Apr 13, 2011 @ 22:55:31
That’s right Justin! We all do apparently.. Thank you for appreciating my work.. 🙂
Apr 13, 2011 @ 20:21:16
great r-evolution….Oliva…nice cadence that rings with “age” ending to self discovery….blessings…bkm
Apr 13, 2011 @ 22:57:10
Thank you Barbara!
= for liking the poem.. 🙂
= for your blessings.. 🙂
I am all set to bring about a revolution indeed.. hugs xx
Apr 13, 2011 @ 16:36:46
fantastic poem olivia- terrific!
trisha
Apr 13, 2011 @ 18:47:04
Thank you Trisha! I always look forward to read you here n there..lolss
I mean at my site n your site.. 🙂
Apr 13, 2011 @ 16:14:09
Loved the rhymes Olivia, how very brilliant you chose each ending word of each line! Yes to revolution and traveling to find evolution!
Apr 13, 2011 @ 18:44:14
Thank you Blaga Bubble!
With this phase coming to an end, a major liberation would be spelled! Once this gets over; I’ll talk about what has been going on.. so far, I have been talking in riddles- not anymore.. 🙂
Many hugs x
Apr 13, 2011 @ 05:16:30
Emotional….out of the shell…nicely done!
Apr 13, 2011 @ 15:29:52
Thank you Ayala.. 🙂 many thanks.. hugs xx
Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:42:04
slogging you home along on your back…it can sure feel like that at times…may you find new freedom in your journey…
Apr 13, 2011 @ 15:29:16
Thank you for your wishes Brian! I am all set now..
I am blessed to have you around.. hugs xx
Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:38:09
Wow Olivia! Sixteen lines and fifteen end with “age”…that in itself is remarkable. What a fitting closing:
Painting now a profound image,
Wanting to travel with my written wordage;
I’ve stepped up like some eternal adage,
Wishing myself “Bon Voyage”…
I can almost see the smashing of the champagne bottle as a new voyage is christened! Good work!
Apr 13, 2011 @ 15:28:16
hehehe..
Tolbert, thank you so much for your kind words and wishes!
I am so glad you liked my write.. 🙂
As I write this, steps have already been taken.. many hugs xxx
Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:10:15
Very emotional, and I can feel your struggle as I read. I think this my first time here, so it’s nice to meet you 🙂
Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:12:48
Yes indeed! Quite likewise Lori..
Thank you so much for stopping by! I so appreciate your reading the essence so close.. Wishing you a nice day ahead.. 😀
Many Hugs xx
Apr 13, 2011 @ 03:01:32
Apropos as you move from one place to another ( physically or in your mind0
Thanks for sharing this week with One Shot
Apr 13, 2011 @ 15:26:57
Thank you Leslie! Your wishes mean a much to me.. many hugs xxx
Apr 13, 2011 @ 02:57:22
Ah, toeing the line. I love rules. How could we break them if they didn’t exist?
Great words, and well written.
Apr 13, 2011 @ 15:26:04
Thank you North! Much appreciated.. you are so encouraging My Dear.. xxx
Apr 13, 2011 @ 01:02:44
I love “Wishing myself Bon Voyage” May wherever you go be a good place Olivia!
Apr 13, 2011 @ 01:17:48
Thank you Dear One.. I am leaving the old phase behind- I feel it so strongly! I was right.. it was indeed a transition period.. 😀
Thank you so much for our wishes.. xxx
Apr 12, 2011 @ 23:13:24
Very mystical…an out of body experience for me…wonderfuL!
RAE 😉
Apr 12, 2011 @ 23:31:35
Thank you Rae! That is a very sweet one indeed! Hugs xx
Apr 12, 2011 @ 07:31:23
Your poems always have such a mystical quality to them. Always leave me thinking. Hugs, pat
Apr 12, 2011 @ 11:23:27
lolss.. Pat, you are kind.. It’s my Life- my present tense so to say! Does that make it a bit relaxed?
Mega Hugs xoxox
Apr 12, 2011 @ 04:52:23
“Wanting to travel with my written wordage”
Love this poem, Olivia…You are sooooooooooo good.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/04/11/sioux-falls-sparkles/
Apr 12, 2011 @ 11:21:16
You are so sweet Leddy! Man, you sure way know how to be good and write inspiring words.. Thank you.. 😀
xxx
Apr 12, 2011 @ 04:33:21
um…WOW ! you did it again! blew me away!
Apr 12, 2011 @ 11:20:25
Your comment flatters me so well! Made my morning.. 😀
Hugs x
Apr 11, 2011 @ 23:18:43
very interesting! mines here olivia~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/18/natures-gravity/
Apr 11, 2011 @ 23:48:13
Thank you Dear xxx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 22:47:24
Very powerful and hopeful, Olivia! Love this is were to went with this prompt!
Apr 11, 2011 @ 23:48:38
Thank you Dear One.. 🙂
Apr 11, 2011 @ 17:17:18
Onward and upward with the arts..and bon voyage for all your endeavours!!
Apr 11, 2011 @ 19:02:15
Thank you Lyn! Need huge pots of wishes.. Thank you.. 😀
Apr 11, 2011 @ 16:28:13
Yeah for Olivia! You go girl and may you have many bon voyages! You deserve an abundance of happiness. Love your imagery.
Best wishes always,
Andy.
Apr 11, 2011 @ 16:48:29
Thank you Andy! I couldn’t have done it without your wishes.. 🙂
May thanks.. I am all set.. a big news already on its way!
Hugs xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 15:03:20
You are doing it! Good for you! And now that you have started, you have to fight it to the end. I see that you like this poetic form I learned recently it’s called ballad. Is it? Strong and at the same time very musical!
Apr 11, 2011 @ 15:11:13
If I say I intentionally wrote a ballad; that would be like saying cats can fly- or is it fish? I wonder if this raw write could anywhere be critiqued; much less compare it with a form..
I am honored lady!
Whatever I write is what I maybe going through at that point of time. I am very passionate about my Life and anything I might take up; so maybe that bubbles up giving a “heroic” edge to its form! It humbles me to read such a beautiful comment!
Yes, I am all set to win it big!! I feel that power surging inside my veins (why not arteries? Veins carry the waste blood- nevermind)
Jokes beside.. I may have an announcement to make over soon!
Hugs xox
Apr 11, 2011 @ 13:57:55
That’s an interesting one, Olivia! I like the rhyming structure you used, it’s very tight and controlled. Cute title too!
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/04/11/evolution-in-a-nutshell/
Apr 11, 2011 @ 14:12:43
Thanks a big bunch Jess Dear!
Apr 11, 2011 @ 13:01:40
Impressive Olivia! As always 🙂
Apr 11, 2011 @ 14:12:10
Thank you Dear One!!
I write whatever I may be going through.. this is my present state of mind.. 🙂
Hugs xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:45:53
Olivia
an unconventional beauty being forced to toe the line, I suspect the force and way this was written the coffined cage beauty or muse will teach others how to soar free when reinvents herself.
joanny
Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:56:20
Thank you Joanny! This is my life- story. A pattern I am coming to break at present.. Thank you for wishing her (me) success!
Hugs xox
Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:27:54
A great new metaphor … human as cephalapod.
Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:57:33
Yeah Terii! A cephalopod is devoid of any back bone. It’s tender n vulnerable..
That human is Me here
Hugs xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 08:13:15
For what you have gone through there’s no doubt there will be an evolution of more amazing you! 🙂
Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:58:11
Thank you for your wishes..!
That’s exactly what I am working on now-a-days.. Hugs xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 07:58:07
You’ve certainly come out of your shell! Clever use of part-rhymes.
Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:59:06
Thank you for being able to relate- yes that’s me!
Thank you for all your wishes.. 🙂
hugs xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 07:44:15
Travel far and wide,
Enjoy the ride,
Remember that it’s the journey,
rather than the destination that is important.
Pack your words in your suitcase and get crawling.
Apr 11, 2011 @ 10:59:49
Thank you Dan! Thank you so much for your wishes.. I need those all.. Hugs xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 07:23:41
Quite the contrast. Learned a new word to boot.
Apr 11, 2011 @ 11:00:37
Thank you Mikey.. 🙂 Hugs xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:48:11
Evolution to revolution. Perceptive take on the prompt, Olivia. Sometimes it seems we go backwards…that sound so negative, doesn’t it? But we have the power to change things!
Apr 11, 2011 @ 11:01:44
Yes..!
I had gone backwards without doubt. I am all bent to change the things now..
Thank you for your kind words.. 🙂
Hugs xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:44:28
vivid images spring from your words…well done.
Apr 11, 2011 @ 11:02:37
Thank you David! xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:39:40
I like the way you weave in the rhymes – elegantly crafted
Apr 11, 2011 @ 11:03:22
Thank you Marousia! xx
Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:11:50
Coffin carriage is very cool!
Apr 11, 2011 @ 06:17:57
Thank you.. 🙂 xx
Apr 10, 2011 @ 17:54:04
Wow, amazing piece! Love the imagery, and especially the ending. Great work!
Apr 10, 2011 @ 18:34:55
Thanks Sonam! The words are my life at present.. 🙂
Apr 10, 2011 @ 06:39:02
Wow, wow, wow… What a rich picture you painted… This is just so rich and full for the theme… 🙂
And I know I mentioned thanks but still thanks again for inviting me to take on this revolutionary theme… *wink*
Hug and Kiss..
Apr 10, 2011 @ 11:36:32
You are always welcome Lady!
For some reason, I knew you would love to do the theme; so… 🙂
Thank you for appreciating this one. Again, my own life story. No fiction! I am glad you liked it.. 😀
Many Hugs n kisses xoxox
Apr 10, 2011 @ 01:30:11
wow…………
a fitting piece for week 30….
lovely word play, you rock………I am stuck with many roles as well….
Apr 10, 2011 @ 01:32:37
Glad you like it Ji!
Many Hugs xox