Suspended

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Doomsday’s close by,
Killing my hopes,
Closing all doors;
Tearing our souls apart!

I’m trapped in a death spell-
Marking my fall,
Crushing my heart,
Alongwith its beat too!

Dreaming is forbidden,
Speech’s muted,
Figures singed;
Eyes are forked blind.

A bottomless pit,
With spinning vortex
Inside a black- hole!
I’m ’bout done wandering here!

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Submitted for Friday Flash 55

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Submitted for Magpie Tales

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66 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. zandrabevis
    Dec 14, 2013 @ 02:41:57

    i love it

    Reply

  2. mindlovemisery
    Jun 10, 2011 @ 21:07:54

    I love the drama and the second to last stanza simply stunning. Very cool poem

    Reply

  3. Tumblewords
    Jun 09, 2011 @ 07:31:01

    Nicely posed. Sometimes the night of the soul goes on and on.

    Reply

    • Olivia
      Jun 09, 2011 @ 13:18:45

      Yessss… Meet one such soul- Me..
      Although I keep chirpy; the life I am leading is not so bright.. I still have many hopes though..

      Hugs xoxox

      Reply

  4. Henry Clemmons
    Jun 09, 2011 @ 04:18:12

    I’d be done wandering too; forked eyes, blind. Yepper, I’d be gone. Great lines and skill with words, environment and purpose. Loved it.

    Reply

  5. Anna :o]
    Jun 09, 2011 @ 00:15:56

    Wonderful stuff Olivia!

    Anna :o]

    Reply

  6. Lyn
    Jun 07, 2011 @ 20:49:51

    The end of the line, huh? Maybe here…but , something beyond? Really loved this one!

    Reply

  7. Kristen Haskell
    Jun 07, 2011 @ 19:31:55

    Holy moly – Lived there in that dark place for years and I am happy to report I found my way out and hope I never return there again. What a powerful piece you have written here. Finding one’s happiness is paramount.

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    • Olivia
      Jun 08, 2011 @ 19:53:16

      You said it Kristen!
      Indeed, it’s dark and dingy out there. a cooped up place yet stretching endlessly! I am snapping hard to come out of it myself.. almost out now..

      Hugs xox

      Reply

  8. Mary
    Jun 07, 2011 @ 04:40:14

    Wow, that’s dark and powerful Olivia! I like the line with ‘eyes foked blind’ especially.

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    • Olivia
      Jun 08, 2011 @ 19:52:07

      Thanks Mary! Wanted this to be really conveying the darkness.. What better or worse than being unable to see.. hence the forking part!
      hugs xx

      Reply

  9. tess kincaid
    Jun 06, 2011 @ 23:19:47

    Dark and turbulent.

    Reply

  10. lolamouse
    Jun 06, 2011 @ 19:51:51

    You convey the darkness and hopelessness all too well. I love how you wove in the “eye” prompt as well. (And I like your picture much better!)

    Reply

  11. jabblog uk
    Jun 06, 2011 @ 19:03:06

    A nightmare of hell – powerful.

    Reply

  12. cloudia
    May 09, 2011 @ 01:50:48

    Aloha from Waikiki

    Comfort Spiral

    >

    >

    Reply

  13. moondustwriter
    May 08, 2011 @ 00:49:28

    The intensity and hopelessness is well conveyed
    excellent my dear

    Reply

  14. Margaret
    May 07, 2011 @ 06:53:30

    A bit like Medusa what with her moving hair and all. But she didn’t get away from it all…

    Reply

  15. Steve Isaak
    May 07, 2011 @ 01:09:22

    Dramatic/spirited, effective work. Good stuff. =)

    Reply

  16. Belinda
    May 07, 2011 @ 00:00:07

    Gosh, this made me hold my breath for some reason. This is stp-in-your-tracks intense.

    I hope you’re well, Olivia! xx

    Reply

  17. AmyLynn
    May 06, 2011 @ 19:46:21

    Good for you in expressing this and taking an action to step out…

    powerful picture and powerful writing

    thanks!

    that is all

    Reply

  18. jingle
    May 06, 2011 @ 19:01:44

    Marvelous 55.

    I get impressed whenever visiting/reading you.
    smiles

    Happy Mother’s Day to Moms around you. Blessings..

    Reply

  19. Austin
    May 06, 2011 @ 18:21:35

    Great and crazy read. Love the last line, like it is my decision to move out and move on. Really enjoyed this one.

    Blood, Sweat and Tears is mine this week.

    Reply

  20. brian
    May 06, 2011 @ 16:40:57

    what a sad verse olivia…cant imagine not being able to dream…and such a sucking black hole would be hard to be around…

    Reply

    • Olivia
      May 06, 2011 @ 19:14:41

      Right Brian.. if this describes even a tenth of what I am in right now. Trying to take control now.. soon I’ll declare my win over it!
      hugs x

      Reply

  21. Anthony North
    May 06, 2011 @ 13:33:56

    Words from the depths. Heartfelt.

    Reply

  22. G-Man
    May 06, 2011 @ 11:00:51

    Olivia…
    I feel EXACTLY like Joanny does.
    Always perfection.
    Loved your 55.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

    Reply

  23. Monkey Man
    May 06, 2011 @ 10:08:21

    Not a fun place to be.

    Reply

  24. Broken Sparkles
    May 06, 2011 @ 07:08:18

    If you’re done wandering here, where to then? I hope somewhere we can have a cup of coffee and laugh …

    Reply

    • Olivia
      May 06, 2011 @ 10:23:35

      You bet!
      I am already sipping my sugarless brew n thinking of you.. 🙂 Laughter..? Boy! I promise I’ll prove I am crazy.. as if I am not!! hehehe

      I’ll get the cake.. 😀

      Reply

  25. Paula Tohline Calhoun
    May 06, 2011 @ 02:48:05

    Interesting: subject and rhythm! Good job!

    Reply

  26. ladynimue
    May 06, 2011 @ 01:08:26

    I found myself all so involved in this post .. sigh !

    Reply

  27. Baishali
    May 05, 2011 @ 21:05:01

    hauntingly beautiful …awesome.

    Reply

  28. dani
    May 05, 2011 @ 12:10:56

    haunting and darkly beautiful! ♥

    Reply

  29. Reflections
    May 05, 2011 @ 10:28:39

    What a fabulous write… thank you for stopping by to share over at my blog. I agree with travelling a ‘nomadic life’… I too lost my parents at a young age (my dad at 18, my mother at 21)… I dealt pretty well with the first as he had not been much of a parent due to mental illness, but the loss of my mother was quite significant for me.

    I believe, though there are times when we must experience more difficulties than we feel we can manage, it is those times that lend strength and appreciation to all of the days of our lives. It’s always nice to hear from similar souls.

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    • Olivia
      May 05, 2011 @ 12:43:31

      Hey Petrina.. you are a sweetheart!

      I agree with what you have said. It’s the difficult times that make us a better human being! Indeed it feels great to connect with the like minded people.. blessed are we.. 🙂
      Many Hugs n Love xoxox

      Reply

  30. joanny
    May 05, 2011 @ 10:19:40

    At first I thought it was my eyes, with the wings and hair moving, but then I know I am Olivia’s blog and nothing but perfection in what ever you do. Awesome pic.
    The poem ah the bittersweet loss of hope and doubts departing on the winds of promise. Truly unique and captivating poetry.

    joanny

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    • Olivia
      May 05, 2011 @ 12:45:25

      Thank you Joanny!
      You are a darling.. I am absolutely humbled. I love your blog pics, coming from you; I am honored indeed! Your words here are like a cool breeze soothing my soul!

      Thank you again Dear One.. Many Hugs xoxox

      Reply

  31. Henry Clemmons
    May 05, 2011 @ 09:12:15

    I so love the stucture of your lines, words and voice. It’s so clear and crisp. I like visiting here.

    Reply

  32. Rachel Grima
    May 05, 2011 @ 01:02:39

    A very good poem! 🙂

    Reply

  33. S Night
    May 05, 2011 @ 00:39:54

    Awesome! Both the pic and the poem!

    Reply

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